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« on: October 29, 2019, 03:58:22 PM »
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Hey guys, I'm excited to announce that I've recently released my first music video. If you could check it out and let me know what you think i'd be greatly grateful. I've posted here before and always took account criticism on how to approach my next project. This is a song that i really love  because it displays my lyricism, character and growth in flow. My music consists of day to day issues and concerns. I don't kill or harm anyone in real life unless provoked so I usually stray away from negative talk and violence. "Human Music" - Kendrick Lamar. This is also my cameraman's first music video so I would love some feedback his way also.  My IGN is Jedhigh_Vayze btw much love to everyone ive crossed and hopefully crpg gets resurrected for the 19th time again and we meet. If u like the video share it please and thanks for reading! Peace.

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« Reply #1 on: October 29, 2019, 04:43:51 PM »
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>You posted this to right place: Well listen to me m8,i really liked the vocal melody in the song and the chorus is so rhymy and sounds amazing.However,the beat in the background MUST MUST MUST BE 4 CHORDS,SIMPLE!I THINK YOU REALLY HAVE POTENTIAL AND YOU ARE DOING REALLY NICE.But that repetetive background tune is not nice.If you really want to be famous one day,pm me,i will teach you chord theory,and send you a song for you to see what i am talking about.I ain't trashtalk you my boi,ain't gonna charge anything too lol i sound like i will ask for money or smt just pm me,add me on discord,ready to listen.This song's chord progression is not,and will not,and not proper to be famous and will not be listened by human robots unless it is made rightly so.
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« Reply #2 on: October 29, 2019, 05:02:24 PM »
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Hey, serious growth, this is actually pretty decent, imho. The emphasis on the last word of every line(is that it?) in the first half or so was somewhat disturbing to me.

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« Reply #3 on: October 29, 2019, 06:10:37 PM »
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Disclaimer: whitey who doesn't really listen to hiphop.

Hey, serious growth, this is actually pretty decent, imho. The emphasis on the last word of every line(is that it?) in the first half or so was somewhat disturbing to me.
were you here all this time lol,ptx you sneaky boi
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« Reply #4 on: October 29, 2019, 06:16:41 PM »
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I'm so white i don't even know what a chucker is.
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« Reply #6 on: October 30, 2019, 04:03:20 AM »
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« Reply #7 on: October 30, 2019, 07:57:36 AM »
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Liked and subscribed.
Bro this is not a good sign.
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« Reply #8 on: October 30, 2019, 03:29:28 PM »
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I'm so white i don't even know what a chucker is.

 :D ROFL, i actually made that slang up from chucks which is also slang for converses. In grade school I bought all of my shoes myself so I only wore converse all-stars (chuck taylors) which were around 50 bucks a pair at the time. I started buying nikes, mid-tops and high-tops after I got into my first fight while wearing vans. I won the fight however I was sliding around trying to throw a punch and it blew my mind so from henceforth I decided traction should never be an issue! :evil: Well, now i have a colorful assortion of converses that I never wear but look nice sitting around.  But in essence thats why the chorus is "dem chuckers they couldnt fit me no mo, now i cop the nikes still tread lightly". P.S. cop is slang for buy

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Hey, serious growth, this is actually pretty decent, imho. The emphasis on the last word of every line(is that it?) in the first half or so was somewhat disturbing to me.
Ah, that was me trying to be more melodic I guess, a criticism of mine in the past was actually that someone couldn't understand the ending of my words so perhaps I overenunciated.

Thanks for checking out my project and your feedback guys! Looking forward to more with the future.

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« Reply #9 on: October 30, 2019, 04:06:12 PM »
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P.S. cop is slang for buy

Aight I ain't THAT white
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« Reply #10 on: October 30, 2019, 05:17:26 PM »
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Nothing wrong with some chucks. I must have owned at least 6-7 pairs back in the day. They do look a bit dated compared to some newer style shoes though. Chucks were big in the 90s.

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« Reply #11 on: November 04, 2019, 02:26:03 PM »
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SO much improvement! The over-annunciation in that verse, you can hear it, we all can, so that's something to look at. The best thing I can say is, let your words do the talking for you, and if people understand what you're saying and what you're saying does actually rhyme it'll work. You don't have to over emphasize or over sell it, if that makes sense. As for the beat/song, I really dig it. Sounds so old school and just has a good vibe to it. I would say it reminds me of Ghetto Boys or something, and that is really great man. Great job finding your voice too man, you sound confident and like you're finding your style. Keep writing, keep recording, and keep doing what you love. Good on you m8.

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« Reply #12 on: November 04, 2019, 03:08:49 PM »
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Nothing wrong with some chucks. I must have owned at least 6-7 pairs back in the day. They do look a bit dated compared to some newer style shoes though. Chucks were big in the 90s.

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« Reply #13 on: November 04, 2019, 03:45:25 PM »
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Unironically Blink 182 more than one lol

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« Reply #14 on: November 04, 2019, 04:29:56 PM »
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Lol ppl getting albums while i torrent all their disco in 5 minutea thanks to my fast internet
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